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如何写出一篇强有力的Why School文书?

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如何写出一篇强有力的Why School文书?

How to Write a Strong “Why This College" Essay

如何写出一篇强有力的 “Why School "的文书

Supplemental essays have been around for generations, and there’s a good reason: they enable admissions officers to see just how serious a candidate is about the target college. That’s particularly important in this test-opolumes, especially to selective colleges and public research universities. tional admissions era characterized by unprecedented application v


I always tell students to picture an admissions reader at their screen reading hundreds of essays. Yours has to stand out and grab their attention. So get ready to nail those supplemental essays, especially your response to the most common prompt: Why [Name of College]?


How Colleges Use Supplemental Essays


According to an article in the Cornell Sun, supplemental essays are reviewed at multiple steps in a complex applicant review process. “The essay is the opportunity for students to demonstrate both their writing skills and that they have taken the time to research and learn about Cornell,” states Pamela Tan, now Deputy Director of Admissions.

根据《康奈尔太阳报》的一篇文章,在复杂的申请审查过程中,附加文书要经过多个步骤的审查。“文书是学生展示他们的写作技巧和他们花时间研究和了解康奈尔大学的机会,"现在的招生副主任Pamela Tan说。

On the Tufts website, Becky Stiles, Associate Director, Tufts Admission, shares:


“I do want to stress the part about being specific in your Why Tufts? Essay . . . Specificity allows you to show off your knowledge of our community while also helping admissions officers picture you here . . . This year, I will read close to 3,000 supplemental essay questions, and it is surprisingly easy to tell when a student just isn’t excited or honest. Put a lot of hustle into your supplement. Know that the time you take pays off . . . Some students who end up applying to Tufts might not have us at the top of their list or have shown demonstrated interest in the traditional sense. But some of those students will show us through their application that they are quintessential Jumbo.”


How Colleges Present Their Essay Prompt


Here are a few “Why [Name of College]?” prompts released for the 2020-21 application cycle.

以下是为2020-21年申请周期发布的一些 “为什么[学院名称]?"的文书题目。

There are thousands of universities and colleges. Why are you interested in attending Chapman? (Chapman, 200 words or fewer)


While arguing a Dartmouth-related case before the U.S. Supreme Court in 1818, Daniel Webster, Class of 1801, delivered this memorable line:


"It is, sir,…a small college, and yet there are those who love it!" As you seek admission to the Class of 2026, what aspects of the College's program, community, or campus environment attract your interest? (Dartmouth, 100 words)

“先生,它是一所小学院,但也有一些人热爱它!" 当你寻求加入2026级时,学院的课程、社区或校园环境的哪些方面吸引你的兴趣?(达特茅斯,100字)

Why are you applying to Occidental? What are your intellectual curiosities and why do you think Occidental is the right place for you to pursue them? (Occidental, 200 words max)


Tell us why you would like to attend the University of Wisconsin–Madison. In addition, please include why you are interested in studying the major(s) you have selected. If you selected undecided, please describe your areas of possible academic interest. (Wisconsin, 650 words)


This is just a brief sampling, of course. As you tackle your supplements, you are bound to encounter this very popular prompt, with some colleges allowing more words than others. On the Common App, supplemental essay questions often appear in sections other than Writing, and this year is no exception. So check carefully before assuming that you’re off the hook.


Your Plan of Attack


Your response to the prompt is a special opportunity to link your skills, interest and research to that specific college.


Try these four techniques:


Take Notes 做笔记

Grid Out Your Ideas 整理你的想法

Focus Foremost on Academics 把重点放在学术上

Write With Style 写得有风格

Be Concise 简洁

Take notes 做好笔记

While I like students to tackle their Personal Essay before writing the supplemental essays, you may want to switch that order if you’re taking a tour soon. Some of my students report that they’ve recently been able to attend formal admissions events; others have gone to campuses and taken self-guided tours. Of course, many have done virtual tours. No matter how you’ve seen a college, jot down your thoughts while they’re fresh in your mind. You don’t want to confuse one college with another. No admissions reader at Michigan wants to read an essay about sitting at the Memorial Union Terrace overlooking Lake Mendota. (That’s Wisconsin, not Michigan.)


Grid out your ideas


Even if you are a masterful writer, it pays to map out your response writing paragraphs.


Focus foremost on academics


If you’ve been to New Orleans, you know that it’s about as lively a city as possible, including quaint streets, po ’boys, beignets and a classic streetcar. While Tulane Admissions appreciates that you love its unique town, would you really take up too many words writing about eating in New Orleans? After all, Tulane is a major research university located on the opposite side of the famous French Quarter. It embodies community service. Highly qualified students receive offers of special housing and honors programs. So whatever your plans might be should you wind up in New Orleans during Mardi Gras, spare Tulane the details and tell them why you want to join their community.

如果你去过新奥尔良,你知道它是一个尽可能活泼的城市,包括古朴的街道、po 'boy、beignets和经典的有轨电车。虽然杜兰大学招生办感谢你对其独特的城市的热爱,但你真的会占用太多文字来写在新奥尔良的饮食吗?毕竟,杜兰大学是一所主要的研究型大学,位于著名的法国区的对面。它体现了社区服务。高素质的学生可以得到特殊的住房和荣誉课程。因此,无论你的计划是什么,如果你在狂欢节期间出现在新奥尔良,请不要告诉杜兰大学这些细节,并告诉他们为什么你想加入他们的社区。

The same holds true of colleges in major urban centers (think NYU, BU, USC). Sure, you want to go to college in [name of city] because of all it has to offer. But would a college rather hear about its location or its academics? Nearby shops or its research labs? What you’d do on a day off or what you’d contribute while on campus? You get the idea.


The student I referred to above took a virtual tour of Tulane, which she used in her introduction. She went on to elaborate on the key points in the grid above. She was admitted Early Action as a Tulane Honors Scholar, receiving the Founders Award merit scholarship: $23,000 annually! With her permission, I am sharing some of her essay below. (For more, check out Supplementing the College Supplement.)


Her opening sentence:


The first virtual campus tour I viewed during my college search process was Tulane’s, and I have yet to view a virtual tourthat had as much as an impact on me.


Her thesis statement


I would like to spend my next four years at a campus that values a balance between academics and involvement in campus life as well as a commitment to their surrounding community, and Tulane checks that box.


Her concluding paragraph:


Ultimately, the strong sense of community of collaborative, service-oriented, and happy students is what has drawn me into the spirited environment at Tulane. I know it is a place where I will not only pursue many academically enriching and challenging opportunities but also where I will find my happiness and form connections with others that will last a lifetime.


Write with style


Remember the storytelling approach that worked so well with your Common App Personal Essay? It can work just as well with the Why [Name of College]? essay. You have a story to tell about why you picked that college and what you can add to its community. Let them hear you!

还记得在你的通用申请个人文书中非常有效的讲故事的方法吗?它在 “为什么选择[大学名称]"一文中也能发挥同样的作用。你有一个故事要讲,为什么你会选择那所大学,以及你能为其社区带来什么。让他们听到你的声音!

That’s not to say that every supplemental essay needs to be clever and loaded with supporting details; some word counts won’t allow that. Be sincere, and use the checklist below. Read your essay out loud if that helps. Share it with a trusted friend or teacher.


Be concise


Tulane’s word count (i.e., up to 800 words) is about as high as you’ll see for Why [Name of College]? What if you’re a prospective film major targeting Chapman University and you have 200 words to show your love? You can’t afford to spare too many words on the proximity to Hollywood. So take those 200 words and make sure you tell Chapman admissions readers what you want to study, how their program will enable you to maximize your experience and what else you’ll be involved with if you’re fortunate enough to be included in their Class of 2026.


Four Things NOT to do on the "Why This College" Essay

在 “为什么选择这所大学 "的文书中,有四件事不能做

Don’t write what you can read on the website. (They already know that.)


Don’t assume optional really means optional. (It doesn’t.)


Don’t tell them they’re the only college that offers incredible internships. (They’re not.)


Don’t reuse essays for different colleges. If you must cut and paste, be sure to edit and customize!


Supplemental Essay Checklist


Look through all sections of the college’s supplement for prompts (not just Writing).


Be sure the essay is written in authentic voice (yours).


Check English grammar and usage.


Verify the word count.


Use the Common App Preview button.

使用Common App的预览按钮。

Link your experiences to the college.


We never know what will happen in a given year. But If you follow these tips, you’ll be on your way to attaining the desired outcome, hopefully at your first choice school!


Keep Reading


Read on for more tips on writing college essays or view Nina Berler's eBook on Supplemental Essays.

继续阅读更多关于写大学文书的提示,或查看Nina Berler的补充文书电子书。

Applying early? See what other applicants are saying on the early decision forums.